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Monday, November 9, 2009

"No Pure, Pure Rose"

Response to:

"A Red, Red Rose" by Robert Burns

O my Luve's like a red, red rose,

That's newly sprung in June;

O my Luve's like the melodie

That's sweetly played in tune


As fair art thou, my bonie lass,

So deep in luve am I;

And I will love thee still, my Dear,

Till a' the seas gang dry.


Till a' the seas gang dry, my Dear

And the rocks melt wi' the sun;

O I will love thee still, my Dear

While the sands o' life shall run.


And fare thee well, my only Luve

And fare thee well, a while

And I will come again, my Luve,

Tho' it were ten thousand miles!


"His Love is no Pure, Pure Rose" by Brooke Anderson


O his Luve's no pure, pure rose,

(But) Perhaps dying for Fall;

O his Luve's no sweet song

(But) Perhaps doom and gloom for all.


With words, he claims to love me long

And withstand the testing tides;

Until the drying earth, he claims,

By me, he'll stay beside.


By me, he'll stay beside, he says

Apocalypse on the horizon;

His words mean nothing more,

than youth to the wizen.


And fare him well, from his Luve

And fare him well, for long;

In hopes of no return, my Luve

Together we don't belong.


Model Poem- Bright Star

Bright Star, would I were stedfast as thou art--
Not in love splendour hung aloft the night
And watching, with eternal lids apart,
Like natures patient, sleepless Eremite,
The moving waters at their priestlike task
Of pure abultion round earth's human shores,
Or gazing on the new soft-fallen mask
Of snow upon the mountains and the moors--
No--yet still stedfast, still unchangeable,
Pillow'd upon my fair love's ripening breast,
To feel for ever its soft fall and swell,
Awake for ever in a sweet unrest,
Still, still to hear her tender-taken breath,
And so live ever--or else swoon to death.



Luminous Venus, if only I were as immortal as you--
Not alone in speldour but forever with companions
Constantly watching without faulter,
The ever enduring earth, forever vigilant,
The blowing wind purifying the air
Cleansing the land and sea,
Or contemplate the concealment on waves
Over the rocky, jagged edges of the deep sea—
No—Forever still immortal, still stable,
Pinned against true loves beating breast
Awake and alert without wasting time sleeping
But now to hear that sweet breath cease
And live with love forever—or invite everlasting rest

Failed Attempts

Step by step I leave the earth,

The second floor my destination.

As distance from the ground grows,

So too does my drowsiness.

The day’s worn clothes still cling to my body:

A collection of the day’s memories.

Scents, frustrations, and laughter

Only add to the familiarity of my blue sweater,

To the comfort of my jeans.

Climbing into bed, these clothes remain on.

They experienced the journey with me;

Not only are they my companions,

But my last attempt to possess the day.


Lying there, I reflect on all

That has occurred:

Friends, new and old,

The taste of coffee and a bagel,

The sight of my father sitting on the couch

As I walked in around midnight,

The noon of thought.[1]

Some days you want to keep,

While others you don’t.

I want Today.


Yet, escape from sleep I cannot;

Eventually relinquishing control,

I give into the natural forces

Pressuring me to give up the day.

All attempts prove futile as

My eyelids grow heavier

At this juncture of control and vulnerability,

Immediately before an inescapable slumber.

My clothes ground me for one last instant

Before plummeting into my dreams,

A culmination of experiences and desires,

Fading into one another,

Reminding me that I cannot possess time:

We are at nature’s mercy.


As the new day rises along with my eyes,

The slept in clothes no longer

Have the appeal they once possessed.

A new day requires new clothes,

A blank canvas waiting to collect

New memories and feelings.

Ultimately I will never posses the day,

Yet, I will continue to try

As I put on another sweater,

Another pair of jeans: the clothes

That will accompany me to sleep.



[1] Barbauld, Anna L. “A Summer Evening’s Meditation.”

Freshman Year (a response to Wordsworth's "Surprised by Joy"

I'll preface this model poem by saying how much I love Wordsworth's "Surprised by Joy". The brief and powerful sonnet has stuck with me since I first read it in Biguenet's Reading Poetry class two years ago. As Biguenet brilliantly put it, "Wordsworth's only consolation is that remembering the death of his daughter is not quite as painful as actually experiencing it. And the next he remembers it, it will be a little less painful still. For time to make the loss of child less painful is itself tragic, but how else can you get up in the morning?" In approaching this assignment, I had to take a lot of time to think about how to model my poem on Wordsworth's. Should I directly react to what he is saying or should I write something totally different with basic romantic themes in mind. Eventually I remembered an experience I had last year when I was woken in the morning by Regina Spektor's "Fidelity" playing softly on my roomates computer. I can only describe how I felt as being "wonderfully heartbroken" because this particular song reminded of five or six different life changing experiences freshman year. At least three of them the song was directly playing when or near when they happened. So I decided to write romantically about it; that is to recollect the emotional experience of hearing this song, which itself reminded me of several very emotional experiences and to process it through poetry.
I have adopted Wordsworth's rhyme scheme, through I fell well short of writing my poem in good iambic pentameter.
Freshman Year

Awoken by the sunlight birthing the new day,
I heard in mind the grandeur of the fading song,
Of Regina's voice both trembling and strong,
Recollecting an eternity of joys once held, now flown away.
Three-forth's a year from August until May,
Three-forth's a year unlike the whole eighteen before,
Nine months where every coming moment had something beautiful in store;
Dancing with a beautiful Mexican girl and the way
Anjle's voice echoed through the silent midnight hall
That we broke into just because we were alive
And young, and holding back is no way to live at all.
And so I dressed and into that new day did dive
And since exist in every moment proud and tall
Knowing life's brevity and to pass it well do strive.

Surprised by joy

Surprised by joy - impatient as the Wind
I turned to share the transport - Oh! with whom
But Thee, deep buried in the silent tomb,
That spot which no vicissitude can find?
Love, faithful love, recalled thee to my mind-
But how could I forget thee? Through what power,
Even for the least division of an hour,
Have I been so beguiled as to be blind
To my most grievous loss!-That thought's return
Was the worst pang that sorrow ever bore,
Save one, one only, when I stood forlorn,
Knowing my heart's best treasure was no more;
That neither present time, nor years unborn
Could to my sight that heavenly face restore.

Model Poem

-Modeled Off of "The Haunted Beach"

Resting Uneasy

Upon the red looming Mars
Where starry dust was scattered
A twin-size bed uprear’d its head,
Amongst the king-sized mountains.
The foo-nu’s gathered at the foot
A sleepful rest they wished;
And, all around, the deaf’ning roar
Re-echo’d on the Reddish Planet
By the still wind feigned.

Above a floating isle was seen
Where Jub birds hover’d, pacing;
And up and down and all around,
Foo-nu clothed isle, waving.
And here and there, a rolling hill
Its lazy back display’d
And near a mountain, at sundown’s time
An old mattress was laid to rest
Where the still winds stay’d.

And often, while the silent wind
Swept o’er the sleepless commotion
The moonlight seen was all serene,
The land made scarce a motion;
Then, while the smaller mountains
The isle wrapped in shade,
The Marsman beheld the grand
Notion of Humans striding hand in hand -
Where the still winds play’d.

And swell their faces were with glee
And jocular they pattered;
And into space with enraptured face
They look’d as they remember’d.
And sometimes, from their gleeful glow
They cheerful guffaws made,
And while the echoes bounced strong and loud
The clear moon bathed the wondrous crowd
Where the still winds play’d!

And then above the peaceful twin-size bed
The happier Jubs perched;
And around the bed, ended the reach
Of the sleepless commotion.
For in the Mars-ian bed,
A sleeping Human was seen laying,
Content smile on his lips
And deep were the sleep marks on his cheek
Where the still winds play'd.

A sleep-bound parody was he
Of his home and kin around;
Who swore to be on Mars
Gracious and excited ever!
But just before sleep took over
A Nyquil bottle his lips felt,
Cool and green, effects untold,
And unlike any human before,
Slept where the still winds play'd!

His human kin, forever blithe
Continued in the yawn-less commotion,
While to each other his eyelids fast,
Clung from spell of potion.
The wintery moon upon the mountains
A silv'ry covering gave,
And showed the Sleeper in new slumber
With empty plastic by the pillow
where the still winds play'd.

And since that hour the Marsman
Has watched and watched the happy game;
For the moon-lit night
gleams on both, the Sleeper and Humans alike!
And when the moon itself is 'sleep,
Commotion, sleepless presides over all
And nothing lights the mountains,
Where the still winds play!

Full eternity, the Sleeper's fate,
So day and night mean nothing;
For Sleep assigned his slumbering mind
Should dream about all things.
Bound by sealed eyes and foggy brain,
He has not pow'r to stray;
But destin'd pensive to remain,
He thinks, with Genius and without,
Imagination, fiery and curious now.

Response to the Haunted Beach

The Haunted Beach by Mary Robinson

Upon a lonely desert beach,
Where the white foam was scatter'd,
A little shed uprear'd its head,
Though lofty barks were shatter'd.
The sea-weeds gathering near the door,
A sombre path display'd;
And, all around, the deafening roar
Re-echoed on the chalky shore,
By the green billows made.

Above a jutting cliff was seen
Where sea-birds hover'd craving;
And all around the craggs were bound
With weeds–for ever waving.
And here and there, a cavern wide
lts shadowy jaws display'd;
And near the sands, at ebb of tide,
A shiver'd mast was seen to ride
Where the green billows stray'd.

And often, while the moaning wind
Stole o'er the summer ocean,
The moonlight scene was all serene,
The waters scarce in motion;
Then, while the smoothly slanting sand
The tall cliff wrapp'd in shade,
The fisherman beheld a band
Of spectres gliding hand in hand–
Where the green billows play'd.

And pale their faces were as snow,
And sullenly they wander'd;
And to the skies with hollow eyes
They look'd as though they ponder'd.
And sometimes, from their hammock shroud,
They dismal howlings made,
And while the blast blew strong and loud,
The clear moon mark'd the ghastly crowd,
Where the green billows play'd.

And then above the haunted hut
The curlews screaming hover'd;
And the low door, with furious roar,
The frothy breakers cover'd.
For in the fisherman's lone shed
A murder'd man was laid,
With ten wide gashes in his head,
And deep was made his sandy bed
Where the green billows play'd.

A shipwreck'd mariner was he,
Doom'd from his home to sever
Who swore to be through wind and sea
Firm and undaunted ever!
And when the wave resistless roll'd,
About his arm he made
A packet rich of Spanish gold,
And, like a British sailor bold,
Plung'd where the billows play'd.

The spectre band, his messmates brave,
Sunk in the yawning ocean,
While to the mast he lash'd him fast,
And braved the storm's commotion.
The winter moon upon the sand
A silvery carpet made,
And mark'd the sailor reach the land,
And mark'd his murderer wash his hand
Where the green billows play'd.

And since that hour the fisherman
Has toil'd and toil'd in vain;
For all the night the moony light
Gleams on the specter'd main!
And when the skies are veil'd in gloom,
The murderer's liquid way
Bounds o'er the deeply yawning tomb,
And flashing fires the sands illume,
Where the green billows play.

Full thirty years his task has been,
Day after day more weary;
For Heaven design'd his guilty mind
Should dwell on prospects dreary.
Bound by a strong and mystic chain,
He has not power to stray;
But destined misery to sustain,
He wastes, in solitude and pain,
A loathsome life away.

Rafiq's Experiment...I mean...
Sky's Forest

High up above our silent heads,
where the white puffs are spread,
the flap of wings and angel things
showed that the sky wasn't dead.
The wind played the featres, and softly too
perhaps in breaking they feared
but still the dance of innocence flew
round and up and down in two,
with the azure ceiling seer.

Above a grove of birds and trees
where life was awake forever,
and time would see no end to bees
and bears and stags to enter.
What things beyond nature would come to pass
yet near the green,
many bushes perhaps,
a thing unnatural, a silver mast,
by the azure ceiling seen.

And perhaps the natural thanked never to hear
at that small moment today
for the doves and deer who felt no fear,
would change to flight from play.
In motion and silence a creature fell,
staggering on the ground bleeding,
The Hunter stepped from where he'd crouched
and had a smile upon his mouth
with the azure ceiling seeing.

The creature moaned and moved and bled,
its wish to survive was true,
the hunder stabbed the creature dead,
a merciful death to few.
And then the light turned into dark
a sudden and startling thing,
The Hunter dragged his kill'ed mark
alone, afraid and surrounded by bark,
under the azure's watering rings.

The rain would come,
and the wind would blow,
the trees would mourn and hum,
as a rumble was heard below.
The darkness would flash
the hunter fearing,
the trees then trashed
and thunder crashed
with the azure ceiling leering.

The Hunter wailed and cried;
he felt that death approached,
he left his pride and fled in stride,
and ignored the prize he'd poached.
The rain fell hard and on,
the trees lost their thirst,
the sky finally ceased its tearful song,
before the coming of the dawn,
which the azure ceiling burst.

The silence was heard
with sigh and relief;
The Hunter like a bird passed through word
of his story as a thief.
"I fear the forest,"
he said with feeling
"whose creatures were loved best,
the one where life is protected at behest,
of the wide azure ceiling."

An Imitation Poem

"The Tyger" by William Blake

Tyger! Tyger! burning bright
In the forests of the night,
What immortal hand or eye
Could frame thy fearful symmetry?

In what distant deeps or skies
Burnt the fire of thine eyes?
On what wings dare he aspire?
What the hand dare seize the fire?

And what shoulder, & what art,
Could twist the sinews of thy heart?
And when thy heart begin to beat,
What dread hand? & what dread feet?

What the hammer? what the chain?
In what furnace was thy brain?
What the anvil? what dread grasp
Dare its deadly terrors clasp?

When the stars threw down their spears
And water'd heaven with their tears,
Did he smile his work to see?
Did he who made the Lamb make thee?

Tyger! Tyger! burning bright
In the forests of the night,
What immortal hand or eye
Dare frame thy fearful symmetry?



"White Wolf"
Through the haze of misty night
A white wolf bathed in glowing light,
Of what could make a creature fair
That in his teeth clutches despair?

How come thee covered in snowy fur
Disguised so as a creature pure?
What made thy icy, frightful eyes
That linger on the darkened skies?

Under the cover of the moon
A piercing howl, impending doom
Does thy heart, with every beat
Grow faster than the ones you eat?

How swiftly do thy movements make
It easy for his soul to take,
A flash of fangs, & blood runs cold,
Dare deadly virtue be so bold?

Terror reigns down through thine eyes
Heaven sleep & heaven cry
And of the maker of the Lamb,
Could thee be formed from that same hand?

Through the haze of misty night
A white wolf bathed in glowing light,
Of what dare make a creature fair
That in his teeth clutches despair?